To answer your question, Vital, in this particular case, yes sir, I did to have to quote the whole chapter
But at least now you actually have enough sense to put a Table of Contents in the OP
... You already know how I feel about your huge update to Chapter 5 since Claire is in it
However, I do have a couple of small complaints
One of them is this:
Chapter 5: Unexpected Ally
"Do you seriously think I can trust you?", Wesker said.
This kinda irked me because it doesn't sound like something Wesker would say
I would have personally made him say something like, "Don't play innocent with me, Ada. After what you did to me, there's simply no reason for me to trust you any longer."
Like I said, small complaint though
The factory entrance began to close on it's own, Jill looked up at the control panel on the second floor. A young woman with dark red hair with a red biker jacket in skinny blue jeans, close the entrance stopping the infected from pouring in, however a group of 30 remained inside.
"Jill! Hurry, get to the second floor!" The Young woman yelled.
Jill acknowledged her orders and moved quickly, she paused and stared at Ada. She began to think. "Even though she double crossed me, she doesn't deserve to die" Jill thought to herself and she lifted Ada up and took her to the second floor to regroup with the Unidentified red haired woman.
Jill examines the woman, she looks familiar and resembles Chris her long time partner since S.T.A.R.S in Raccoon city. She then questions the Woman to why she's here..
"Wait, Who are you and why are you here?" Jill questioned
"I'm the Terra Save agent who was sent to assist you in your mission but I'm guessing you didn't get the Memo. I searched all over for you then I seen a Helicopter land on top of this building, and I have a feeling it's coming back to pick up Wesker so we have to confront him fast before he gets away with the G-Virus" Claire said to Jill.
Also, a small plothole here
At first, you label her as "unidentified" only to turn around and reveal her name seconds later when Claire herself didn't even mention her name to Jill when they first meet up
Obviously, RE fans like you, me and Shira can overlook this since we already know that red haired girl= Claire
But it might end up confusing those who don't know much of RE and don't know who Claire is
Last thing, about Jill having "feelings" for Ada
By feelings, do you mean that she's developing romantic feelings for Ada? Or are her feelings towards Ada just sisterly feelings?
But yeah, this is getting better with each chapter, I like how the action is slowly beginning to unfold
Makes me even more eager to read the next chapters