The Island: A tale of epic proportions
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PizzaMasta
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This looks really good so far, well done. I'll leave my name to be a cameo in the story here too, as I'm not sure if I should leave it here or in the original thread.
Killer Ryno
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Tenacious-G
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Awesome first chapter!
I'm egarly awating my role in this.
I'm egarly awating my role in this.
Nasty_Freak
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As I said in the other thread, can my role be a female character who is already dead and is a ghost. She can be a male character's lover who encourages him to succeed. Something like that. Something that dramatic. Thanks. ;-)
Toxic
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I've been writing some more. Prepare to have your mind thoroughly blown by the epicness that is "Chapter Two: Battle Stations!" Enjoy!
Chapter 2: Battle Stations!
“They’re still on us sir.”
“How is that possible? We made a random jump! There’s no way one of their ships could have followed us!”
“Well they just did sir.”
“How far away is the ship?”
“It’s not just a ship sir. It’s an entire battle division. They’re heading straight for us. ETA in abou-”
CRASH!
“What the hell was that!”
“They’re here sir. The aliens are on us.”
“I guess it’s finally time. Get on the horn, tell the men to man their battle stations. We take as many down as we can. I’m not losing without a fight!”
“Attention! All personnel report to their battle stations and prepare for combat! This is not a drill! I repeat, this is not a drill!”
“Oh, and PizzaMasta, get me Alpha Team. Our scanners show a planet much like earth just a little ahead of us. I’m going to try and land us there, but I’ll need someone to secure us a landing zone.”
“Yes sir! Alpha team report to the bridge! I repeat, Alpha Team report to the bridge! Chief -Unknown- needs your services! They should be up in a few minutes sir.”
“Good, now how are defences doing? Allbis! Report!”
“Our cloaking system is holding out well sir. Our gungnir missiles have crippled two of their ships. I’m using the accelerator cannon to finish them off.”
“Great work. If we survive this, your due for a promotion.”
“Thank you sir! Wait a sec... scanners show numerous small ships incoming. They look like boarding craft. Why would they try and board us? The aliens never capture, they only destroy. Sir?”
“Maybe they want our cloaking technology. Just make sure they don’t get on board.”
“Yes sir!”
How did they find out about Alpha Team? That’s the only reason they’d have for boarding our ship. But the enhancements were done right before lift off. They didn’t even leave with us. There’s no way the aliens could have found out about them, is there?
“Sir! Alpha Team is here.”
“Thank you PizzaMasta. At ease soldiers.”
“Sir, you needed us?”
“Yes DJK, I do. The aliens are after us, and it seems like they brought have their goddamn fleet with them too. Prominence is a beautiful ship, the finest in our fleet, but even she can’t hold off an entire alien battle division.”
“So what do we do?”
“There’s a small planet just a few minutes from here. It’s much like earth. Our scanners show it to be habitable for humans. I’m going to try and land Prominence there, but I need someone to secure a landing site.”
“Why us sir?”
“When the aliens see a lone drop ship heading for a small planet, they’ll know what I’m trying to do. You’re the only soldiers who can fight them off. No one else can do what you soldiers do. I need the best of the best, and you are the best. You up to it?”
“Of course sir. If I may ask, who will the pilot of our ship be?”
“The same person who got you off of Cerberus IX.”
“MKdaz?”
“That’s right.”
“When do we leave?”
“Head down to hangar 7 now. MKdaz will meet you there. Get in the ship, and wait for the doors to open. Daz will take care of the rest. See you on the ground soldiers.”
“Yes sir!”
-Unknown- watched as the five members of Alpha Team, and his ships last hope, dashed out of the bridge. “I just hope they make it down all right. If they don’t we’re all dead.”
“Do you really think they can do it?”
“If they can’t than no one can. You heard about Cerberus IX, didn’t you Pizza Masta?”
“Yes sir. Didn’t they hold out for hours against thousands of alien troops?”
“They fought until MKdaz saw them during planetary evacuation. They’re our best soldiers, outfitted with our best equipment, and they have one of the finest pilots mankind has ever produced getting them in and out of tight situations. I doubt even the aliens can claim to have a squad of that caliber.”
“Your right sir, I’m just nervous about having all our lives resting on the shoulders of five soldiers and a pilot.”
“Don’t be. They’re our best hope. Just make sure the doors open for them.”
“Right sir.”
* * *
“You soldiers ready for this?”
“You know better than us Daz. You saw us on Cerberus.”
“If that reflects your guys skill on this mission, than -Unknown- has nothing to worry about. Doors are opening in five! Hold on!”
“Hey, DJK?”
“Yes Jade?”
“How do we map out and secure a landing area on a planet that we have zero charts on, and have never once stepped foot on?”
“We go in and get the job done. When we’ve got that landing zone, we’ll write up the maps. Remember, everyone on this ship, maybe even all of mankind, are counting on us. This is a new battlefield. There might be new enemies, there might be new allies. There might even be new weapons. But one thing never changes: Our mission. Our mission to preserve and protect all of mankind against those who would harm it. As long as we keep true to that mission, then even if we lose, we won’t have failed.”
“Yes sir!”
“Now lets go bring our ship home!”
End of Chapter 2
Please leave feedback both good and bad. I really want to make this as good as possible.
Characters introduced in this story:
Major roles:
-Unknown-
theDJK
Jade
MKdaz
Minor roles:
Pizzamasta
Allbis
EDIT: Sorry for the lack of indents, but when I pasted this from word, it removed the indents.
Chapter 2: Battle Stations!
“They’re still on us sir.”
“How is that possible? We made a random jump! There’s no way one of their ships could have followed us!”
“Well they just did sir.”
“How far away is the ship?”
“It’s not just a ship sir. It’s an entire battle division. They’re heading straight for us. ETA in abou-”
CRASH!
“What the hell was that!”
“They’re here sir. The aliens are on us.”
“I guess it’s finally time. Get on the horn, tell the men to man their battle stations. We take as many down as we can. I’m not losing without a fight!”
“Attention! All personnel report to their battle stations and prepare for combat! This is not a drill! I repeat, this is not a drill!”
“Oh, and PizzaMasta, get me Alpha Team. Our scanners show a planet much like earth just a little ahead of us. I’m going to try and land us there, but I’ll need someone to secure us a landing zone.”
“Yes sir! Alpha team report to the bridge! I repeat, Alpha Team report to the bridge! Chief -Unknown- needs your services! They should be up in a few minutes sir.”
“Good, now how are defences doing? Allbis! Report!”
“Our cloaking system is holding out well sir. Our gungnir missiles have crippled two of their ships. I’m using the accelerator cannon to finish them off.”
“Great work. If we survive this, your due for a promotion.”
“Thank you sir! Wait a sec... scanners show numerous small ships incoming. They look like boarding craft. Why would they try and board us? The aliens never capture, they only destroy. Sir?”
“Maybe they want our cloaking technology. Just make sure they don’t get on board.”
“Yes sir!”
How did they find out about Alpha Team? That’s the only reason they’d have for boarding our ship. But the enhancements were done right before lift off. They didn’t even leave with us. There’s no way the aliens could have found out about them, is there?
“Sir! Alpha Team is here.”
“Thank you PizzaMasta. At ease soldiers.”
“Sir, you needed us?”
“Yes DJK, I do. The aliens are after us, and it seems like they brought have their goddamn fleet with them too. Prominence is a beautiful ship, the finest in our fleet, but even she can’t hold off an entire alien battle division.”
“So what do we do?”
“There’s a small planet just a few minutes from here. It’s much like earth. Our scanners show it to be habitable for humans. I’m going to try and land Prominence there, but I need someone to secure a landing site.”
“Why us sir?”
“When the aliens see a lone drop ship heading for a small planet, they’ll know what I’m trying to do. You’re the only soldiers who can fight them off. No one else can do what you soldiers do. I need the best of the best, and you are the best. You up to it?”
“Of course sir. If I may ask, who will the pilot of our ship be?”
“The same person who got you off of Cerberus IX.”
“MKdaz?”
“That’s right.”
“When do we leave?”
“Head down to hangar 7 now. MKdaz will meet you there. Get in the ship, and wait for the doors to open. Daz will take care of the rest. See you on the ground soldiers.”
“Yes sir!”
-Unknown- watched as the five members of Alpha Team, and his ships last hope, dashed out of the bridge. “I just hope they make it down all right. If they don’t we’re all dead.”
“Do you really think they can do it?”
“If they can’t than no one can. You heard about Cerberus IX, didn’t you Pizza Masta?”
“Yes sir. Didn’t they hold out for hours against thousands of alien troops?”
“They fought until MKdaz saw them during planetary evacuation. They’re our best soldiers, outfitted with our best equipment, and they have one of the finest pilots mankind has ever produced getting them in and out of tight situations. I doubt even the aliens can claim to have a squad of that caliber.”
“Your right sir, I’m just nervous about having all our lives resting on the shoulders of five soldiers and a pilot.”
“Don’t be. They’re our best hope. Just make sure the doors open for them.”
“Right sir.”
* * *
“You soldiers ready for this?”
“You know better than us Daz. You saw us on Cerberus.”
“If that reflects your guys skill on this mission, than -Unknown- has nothing to worry about. Doors are opening in five! Hold on!”
“Hey, DJK?”
“Yes Jade?”
“How do we map out and secure a landing area on a planet that we have zero charts on, and have never once stepped foot on?”
“We go in and get the job done. When we’ve got that landing zone, we’ll write up the maps. Remember, everyone on this ship, maybe even all of mankind, are counting on us. This is a new battlefield. There might be new enemies, there might be new allies. There might even be new weapons. But one thing never changes: Our mission. Our mission to preserve and protect all of mankind against those who would harm it. As long as we keep true to that mission, then even if we lose, we won’t have failed.”
“Yes sir!”
“Now lets go bring our ship home!”
End of Chapter 2
Please leave feedback both good and bad. I really want to make this as good as possible.
Characters introduced in this story:
Major roles:
-Unknown-
theDJK
Jade
MKdaz
Minor roles:
Pizzamasta
Allbis
EDIT: Sorry for the lack of indents, but when I pasted this from word, it removed the indents.
JSOOGZ
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you're not kidding at all.
Alisa
Team DCP Head Cheerleader
Toxic
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The first few chapters are introducing the characters from various sects. Chapter 1 introduced the islanders, chapter two the space marines, chapter three will probably introduce the kombatants, and chapter 4 will introduce the aliens. Chapter five will bring them all together, and it'll continue from there.
Flying Jinko
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Good job mate, the story is shaping out really well. Just one question though, How do the aliens look like? Are they like District 9 aliens or more human like?
Toxic
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Yeah, I haven't actually gotten that far yet.
Also, I can't come up with a decent name for the aliens, so if someone can come up with a name that I like, I'll use it.
