The Beach(a non-ryming poem)

[bad10]

The Beach
By David Livingston Hawkins III


The crash of waves on the shore like leaves in fall,

Sand in my toes like snow in my shoes in winter,

Peaceful breeze on a warm summer day,

The smell of ice cream is like the smell of flowers on a spring day,

I love the beach,

The sound of children playing like birds singing,

I love Summer,

The splash of water fills my ears!


What do you think?

It's not mk but i don't know where else to show it

 

[THE JOHNNY ROOK]

Would have been better if it did rhyme.

Who likes water in their ears? Does not remind me of summer, reminds me of a bad time.

 

[bad10]

Would have been better if it did rhyme.

Who likes water in their ears? Does not remind me of summer, reminds me of a bad time.

It means you hear the splash of waves.

 

[Toxic]

Would have been better if it did rhyme.

I hate it when people say this. It's called free-verse! Personally, I much prefer free-verse over rhyming.

 

[BBBLP]

Rhyming poetry is so much better.



Free Verse is just making observations with an emotional stick in yer butt.

 

[Toxic]

...I beg to differ.

 

[bad10]

...I beg to differ.

Me too,Toxic.Do you like my poem?

 

[Tyler Welby]

I agree, I like rhyming. You have to actually think about it, opposed to describing stuff. But whatever one you like, go along with it.

 

[Toxic]

I just that rhyming restricts what youcan express with your writing, and that's kind of the point to poetry... At least for me.

Bad, I'll write a review when I'm off mobile.

 

[bad10]

I just that rhyming restricts what youcan express with your writing, and that's kind of the point to poetry... At least for me.

Bad, I'll write a review when I'm off mobile.

ok,toxic!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

I agree, I like rhyming. You have to actually think about it, opposed to describing stuff. But whatever one you like, go along with it.

It takes a lot of work to do an emotional poem!Ryming does not matter!