The sun(ryming poem)

[bad10]

As the sun shines in my window,
The day starts to glow,
I love the sun's rays,
And I love summer days,

The sun is a day star in the sky,
When the sun comes up I fell like I can fly,
The sun is a crystal!A fiery flame,
I think I can hear it calling my name...

 

[Armageddon]

It's good, I've hear better, but a lot worse....

 

[bad10]

It's good, I've hear better, but a lot worse....

thanks...i think.

 

[BBBLP]

That was actually very nice bad.
Its really cool if you imagine this poem being told by Icarus, right before he took flight.

 

[THE JOHNNY ROOK]

You should increase your vocabulary.

I can see where you are going with this. Let me try and portray what you are saying in a non rhyming poem.

The sun(ryming poem)

As the sun shines in my window,
The day starts to glow,
I love the sun's rays,
And I love summer days,

The sun is a day star in the sky,
When the sun comes up I fell like I can fly,
The sun is a crystal!A fiery flame,
I think I can hear it calling my name...

The sun(ryming poem)
As the sun is 93 million miles away from earth
The day is almost past my bed time
I like the sun's shape
I stared too long, against mothers wishes

The sun is a star, our star, out of quadrillions of stars
Like the moon
"It is but ours" She said
When the sun comes up, I get high
My bowl crystallizes, a fiery flame
I think I heard my name, from underneath your pillow as you spoke

 

[bad10]

heres another poem:

Winter and Spring

The snow piles up on the ground,
I can hear the snows soft sound,
As it falls,
For us all,
To see,

I love to play in the snow,
I say to my mother "let's go"
I build a snowman,
Instead of a hat he wears a tin can,

But soon spring comes and melts the snow,
And animals come from hibernation to go,
Out and play in the flowers,
I play in the flowers with the animals for hours!


What do you think?