(Comic) The story of Snow.

Snow

Snow

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Yo! I've been working on the story for months and I think It's ready.
Introducing: Mortal Kombat: The Adventures of SNOW!!!!

I will post each issue weekly in case anyone was wondering when the next one will be made.

NOTE: If anyone has any tips I'd be glad to listen.
 
It's cool I suppose, just a few flaws-
1.Try improving the dialouge a tiny bit so that it's easier to understand. I had to read it twice, but it might just be me.

2. Instead of making SZ's corpse disappear into a black smudge, you should have put a really gruesome, bloody skeleton. Any gory, evil graphics like that get props in my books.
Hope to see the next one! Hope it's got a really great story to it.:)
 
woah! Satin is starting to sound like a real pro! nice critique.

as he said, the body shouldn't really be black smudge. Snow, you familiar with Rayden's MKDA fatality in which he crisps then explodes his opponents like a sacrifice? If so, think about what the opponent looks like just before they are shredded: Thinned-out; burnt to a pure crisp. All crusty with their mouths and eyelids open. That's basically how it should look, but with smoke lifting from the newly toasted corpse like it just came outta the Quizno's oven.
 
Nice, but it needs to be longer next time, there's only so much you can get in 4 panels.
I like the recoloured Subby sprite for Scorpion, but it'd be more authentic to use his Fire-breathing fatality sprite
 
Hey again! I know I said I'd post new ones weekly and I hope you guys don't mind but I had nothing to do besides continue the story.
Anyways, let the story continue!
 
a little problem with Dialogue here, I don't think Scorpion would be the type of person to say the word 'kid'. But artistic licence and all. Keep it up, I'm enjoying this more than most sprite comics.
 
Hey, guys. sorry it's been a while but I've been busy and hadn't had a chance to work on the comic, but I'm back in business and ready to roll with another issue!
 
I had to read through it twice to understand it. You should make the dialouge better and maybe put some narration so we know what's going on. Nice choice of sprites, but bad sprite placement at some points- example- at the 4th frame I thought snow's hand was being electrecuted, and shao kahn was barely visisble. keep making them though the first joke was kind of funny:)
 
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