What do you think of my fanfiction so far?

It's cool to have idols, everyone does, but, you really need to get away from basically re-telling Jurassic Park. I haven't read everything you have posted, but, from what I saw, your ideas are all based on JP. If you want to be your own writer, you have to have your own ideas. If you just continue to feed from other people's ideas, you wont make it very far. You have to be original to get noticed. If people see that you just stay around someone else's idea, they will think you don't have the creativity to have your own ideas.